November 9th, 2018

Tribble at the Door

The Ghost Monument REVISED

Title: The Ghost Monument REVISED
Author: betawho
Rating: PG
Characters: 13th Doctor, Yaz, Ryan, Graham
Words: 7053

Season 11 has been a bit dull for me. So I wondered if editing the scripts might improve it.

This is a revised version of the  Doctor Who episode "Ghost Monument." Edited to remove repeated dialogue, clarify explanations, shift some dialogue to different characters, and fix some scenes that seemed out of character. Hopefully this will make the story more exciting and flow smoother. See if you can find the changes, and let me know what you think works.Collapse )